Useful feedback names a place in the draft, describes an effect and connects a suggestion to the writer's stated goal. It does not attack the person or demand one preferred style. A writer can consider feedback without accepting every suggestion.
Worked example
At the time jump, I could not tell how much time passed; a time cue might help is more actionable than This is bad.
Make It Your Own
Optional theme: a place that changes overnight. Exchange a fictional draft or review your own. Write two comments tied to exact moments and a stated goal, then decide which revision to try. You may draw, write or tell your idea. Use invented characters and places; no personal information or upload is needed. This activity is not scored.
Reflect on your choices
- Discuss the text and its intended effect, not the writer's worth.
- Explain one intentional choice and one possible alternative.
- There is no required style or single correct creative response.